Script For Updated Scene

The change in scene from swimming pool to laser quest has proven to be quite successful. I much prefer it, as I think it gives a better insight into his character and isn't quite as slapstick as the original, which I think is better.
During the shoot at laser quest, I want to make the colours to really stand out, whilst they are playing. Having these against a dark background will look lovely, and by having very detailed sound of pandemonium, it will be quite amusing, especially as the audience will not know what is going on. I have written Edward has being a bit of a power freak in this scene to emphasise his insecurities more so.